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What do you think about this poem? | This was your finest work. Keep it up | | 83% | [ 5 ] | Good one but I like poem with humour | | 17% | [ 1 ] | Well not better than your other ones | | 0% | [ 0 ] | Quit poetry my friend | | 0% | [ 0 ] |
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Rahul Stupid and Annoying
Posts : 6147 Join date : 2009-04-21 Age : 32 Location : shekshy shekshy
| Subject: The Negatives In Me Sun Jul 12, 2009 10:06 pm | |
| The Negatives In Me
Feel the agony, feel the pain Sometimes I feel there isn't an iota of respect I've ever gained Unapproachable to most, approachable to few I've never learned much from the things I've been through
Hard to mingle most of times People who know me well think I'm a little wise Sometimes I feel full of stress and strain This life often seems to be a bit of a pain
I want the world to be free of it But I know this isn't possible one bit I hope the tension in me is set free There isn't much I can do as I'm mostly a reticent bee
I've always been a reticent fellow Never really opened up and always mellow Currently struck with fever, I'm a bit yellow Although I believe in God, I've never been much hallow
Never really cared much for the smaller things in life Life has always been as sharp as a knife Although this poem may seem like bollocks This one isn't tripe
The Internet is a place that sets me free This is the place where I'm not a reticent bee Inhibitions are shed and words galore Time is gone and the conversations flow
This verse may seem long and you might be snoring If you don't know me, you'll think I'm very boring But know me once and I'll be your best bud This will last for long and it won't be a dud
You'd think this is copied, it isn't, no! I've written this myself even if I'm not a pro There isn't much humour in this one for sure As these are the negatives I've had and the poem is very pure
These are the negatives in this reticent bee Which are for everyone to see This may or may not change your outlook towards me I've had these since ages, yes, these are the negative in me
- Rahul Parekh
Dated: 7.52 pm, 12th January, 2009
Last edited by Rahul on Mon Jul 13, 2009 12:48 pm; edited 2 times in total (Reason for editing : Spell Check) |
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Vishal16 Doesn't like his tagline messed around with
Posts : 5295 Join date : 2009-04-21 Age : 33 Location : Mumbai
| Subject: Re: The Negatives In Me Mon Jul 13, 2009 12:04 am | |
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Rahul Stupid and Annoying
Posts : 6147 Join date : 2009-04-21 Age : 32 Location : shekshy shekshy
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| Subject: Re: The Negatives In Me Mon Jul 13, 2009 1:52 pm | |
| Nice one ! |
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Rahul Stupid and Annoying
Posts : 6147 Join date : 2009-04-21 Age : 32 Location : shekshy shekshy
| Subject: Re: The Negatives In Me Mon Jul 13, 2009 1:53 pm | |
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Guest Guest
| Subject: Re: The Negatives In Me Mon Jul 13, 2009 2:11 pm | |
| I read it fucker ! |
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Rahul Stupid and Annoying
Posts : 6147 Join date : 2009-04-21 Age : 32 Location : shekshy shekshy
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| Subject: Re: The Negatives In Me Mon Jul 13, 2009 2:36 pm | |
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Vishal16 Doesn't like his tagline messed around with
Posts : 5295 Join date : 2009-04-21 Age : 33 Location : Mumbai
| Subject: Re: The Negatives In Me Mon Jul 13, 2009 5:34 pm | |
| :dickhead: |
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Rahul Stupid and Annoying
Posts : 6147 Join date : 2009-04-21 Age : 32 Location : shekshy shekshy
| Subject: Re: The Negatives In Me Mon Jul 13, 2009 6:36 pm | |
| Instead of posting fuck all smilies give me opinion on this poem. That is the purpose for the thread. |
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Vishal16 Doesn't like his tagline messed around with
Posts : 5295 Join date : 2009-04-21 Age : 33 Location : Mumbai
| Subject: Re: The Negatives In Me Mon Jul 13, 2009 6:59 pm | |
| Excellent one. A1 quality and the best verse was
This verse may seem long and you might be snoring If you don't know me, you'll think I'm very boring But know me once and I'll be your best bud This will last for long and it won't be a dud |
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mrportuguese
Posts : 52 Join date : 2009-07-11 Age : 35 Location : Karachi,Pakistan
| Subject: Re: The Negatives In Me Mon Jul 13, 2009 7:02 pm | |
| - Rahul wrote:
- The Negatives In Me
Feel the agony, feel the pain Sometimes I feel there isn't an iota of respect I've ever gained Unapproachable to most, approachable to few I've never learned much from the things I've been through
Hard to mingle most of times People who know me well think I'm a little wise Sometimes I feel full of stress and strain This life often seems to be a bit of a pain
I want the world to be free of it But I know this isn't possible one bit I hope the tension in me is set free There isn't much I can do as I'm mostly a reticent bee
I've always been a reticent fellow Never really opened up and always mellow Currently struck with fever, I'm a bit yellow Although I believe in God, I've never been much hallow
Never really cared much for the smaller things in life Life has always been as sharp as a knife Although this poem may seem like bollocks This one isn't tripe
The Internet is a place that sets me free This is the place where I'm not a reticent bee Inhibitions are shed and words galore Time is gone and the conversations flow
This verse may seem long and you might be snoring If you don't know me, you'll think I'm very boring But know me once and I'll be your best bud This will last for long and it won't be a dud
You'd think this is copied, it isn't, no! I've written this myself even if I'm not a pro There isn't much humour in this one for sure As these are the negatives I've had and the poem is very pure
These are the negatives in this reticent bee Which are for everyone to see This may or may not change your outlook towards me I've had these since ages, yes, these are the negative in me
- Rahul Parekh
Dated: 7.52 pm, 12th January, 2009 brilliant |
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ashirwad Nice guy. Hyperactive and 50k+
Posts : 15 Join date : 2009-04-22 Age : 33 Location : Bhubaneshwar
| Subject: Re: The Negatives In Me Wed Jul 15, 2009 1:39 pm | |
| as i have already told rahul.. guess he has done betetr and wud do better..not that this was bad. good wrk. |
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Rahul Stupid and Annoying
Posts : 6147 Join date : 2009-04-21 Age : 32 Location : shekshy shekshy
| Subject: Re: The Negatives In Me Wed Jul 15, 2009 1:53 pm | |
| - ashirwad wrote:
- as i have already told rahul.. guess he has done betetr and wud do better..not that this was bad.
good wrk. I'd say I've never written a better one than this. Humourous yes, but not better ones. |
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Aakarsh007 How is my pout?
Posts : 114 Join date : 2009-07-08 Age : 30 Location : Patna
| Subject: Re: The Negatives In Me Wed Jul 15, 2009 6:45 pm | |
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Vishal16 Doesn't like his tagline messed around with
Posts : 5295 Join date : 2009-04-21 Age : 33 Location : Mumbai
| Subject: Re: The Negatives In Me Wed Jul 15, 2009 7:47 pm | |
| - Aakarsh007 wrote:
- Good One, Keep it up
My advice for that will be consume viagra...otherwise it wont be up for long |
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Rahul Stupid and Annoying
Posts : 6147 Join date : 2009-04-21 Age : 32 Location : shekshy shekshy
| Subject: Re: The Negatives In Me Wed Jul 15, 2009 10:22 pm | |
| - Vishal16 wrote:
- Aakarsh007 wrote:
- Good One, Keep it up
My advice for that will be consume viagra...otherwise it wont be up for long I say shut up you obsessive pervert |
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Vishal16 Doesn't like his tagline messed around with
Posts : 5295 Join date : 2009-04-21 Age : 33 Location : Mumbai
| Subject: Re: The Negatives In Me Sat Jul 18, 2009 1:25 am | |
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Rahul Stupid and Annoying
Posts : 6147 Join date : 2009-04-21 Age : 32 Location : shekshy shekshy
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| Subject: Re: The Negatives In Me Sat Jul 18, 2009 2:44 pm | |
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Vishal16 Doesn't like his tagline messed around with
Posts : 5295 Join date : 2009-04-21 Age : 33 Location : Mumbai
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Meh Sniggy
Posts : 42 Join date : 2010-02-21 Age : 32
| Subject: Re: The Negatives In Me Thu Feb 25, 2010 1:39 pm | |
| The best so far. |
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Rahul Stupid and Annoying
Posts : 6147 Join date : 2009-04-21 Age : 32 Location : shekshy shekshy
| Subject: Re: The Negatives In Me Thu Feb 25, 2010 6:08 pm | |
| - Meh wrote:
- The best so far.
Thanks. Too bad I couldn't come up with anything better in about 8months since that one PS: Cool avatar(DP) by the way. |
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Vishal16 Doesn't like his tagline messed around with
Posts : 5295 Join date : 2009-04-21 Age : 33 Location : Mumbai
| Subject: Re: The Negatives In Me Thu Feb 25, 2010 8:14 pm | |
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Rahul Stupid and Annoying
Posts : 6147 Join date : 2009-04-21 Age : 32 Location : shekshy shekshy
| Subject: Re: The Negatives In Me Thu Feb 25, 2010 9:22 pm | |
| - Vishal16 wrote:
- Avatar sucks
Fixed. |
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Vishal16 Doesn't like his tagline messed around with
Posts : 5295 Join date : 2009-04-21 Age : 33 Location : Mumbai
| Subject: Re: The Negatives In Me Thu Feb 25, 2010 9:29 pm | |
| - Rahul wrote:
- Vishal16 wrote:
- Avatar sucks
Fixed. Fixed again |
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Rahul Stupid and Annoying
Posts : 6147 Join date : 2009-04-21 Age : 32 Location : shekshy shekshy
| Subject: Re: The Negatives In Me Thu Feb 25, 2010 9:34 pm | |
| - Vishal16 wrote:
- Rahul wrote:
- Vishal16 wrote:
- Vishal sucks
Fixed. Fixed again And again |
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Vishal16 Doesn't like his tagline messed around with
Posts : 5295 Join date : 2009-04-21 Age : 33 Location : Mumbai
| Subject: Re: The Negatives In Me Thu Feb 25, 2010 9:36 pm | |
| - Rahul wrote:
- Vishal16 wrote:
- Rahul wrote:
- Vishal16 wrote:
- Avatar sucks
Fixed. Fixed again And again ...... |
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Guest Guest
| Subject: Re: The Negatives In Me Thu Feb 25, 2010 9:37 pm | |
| Opacity of a heart so divine |
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Rahul Stupid and Annoying
Posts : 6147 Join date : 2009-04-21 Age : 32 Location : shekshy shekshy
| Subject: Re: The Negatives In Me Thu Feb 25, 2010 9:46 pm | |
| I tried Snigdha but Vishal just hates your avatar so much. |
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